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08 November 2008 @ 06:35 pm
Flash Challenge Haiku for "School Hard"  

"School Hard" was the new episode being featured over at[info]fantas_magoria this week. Their flash challenge was "Spike has fought two Slayers in the last century, and... he's killed them both." says Giles. Write a haiku poem for each of those incidents.

This was so much fun! Spoilers for "Fool for Love." Whee!

I. Blade to brow cuts deep
a permanent reminder
that she could have won

Blood of the Slayer
brings him Drusilla, at last
princess to his king

II. Blinded by darkness
she falls, victim to his hands
released from her yoke

Gilded black leather
marks his deadly signature
a sleek trophy piece
 

 

 
 
 
petzipellepingo: spike duster walking by the_royal_annapetzipellepingo on November 9th, 2008 12:16 am (UTC)
Blinded by darkness
she falls, victim to his hands
released from her yolk

Gilded black leather
marks his deadly signature
a sleak sleek trophy piece


Definitely a sleek trophy piece and something he was so terribly proud of. Very nice.
ClawofCat: Buffy break freeclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 12:24 am (UTC)
*cringe* Oh god. Thanks for pointing that out. Typo of doom.

As for the coat, it's such a part of him. I missed it so much in S7. I think I might also have screamed in a really ridiculous fashion when the bad-ass music started up and he retrieved it in "Get it Done." Spike needs his swagger, damnit!
The Anti-OTPsnowpuppies on November 9th, 2008 01:04 am (UTC)
Change in perspective
from the Slayer to the slain,
you capture quite well.

Spike becomes himself
by taking bits and pieces
of those he has killed.

ClawofCat: pondersclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:39 am (UTC)
Oh, that was particularly good haiku f/b. Very true. I alternated between the Slayer and Spike in each set, and also incorporated things he acquires as a result of their deaths. Hm, he's a bit like a serial killer, isn't he? Saving all sorts of mementos to flesh out his character.

Do you think Spike ever encountered a true villain/human killer? Like, Son of Sam? I wonder how he would view a person like that.
(no subject) - snowpuppies on November 9th, 2008 05:48 am (UTC) (Expand)
(no subject) - clawofcat on November 9th, 2008 06:16 am (UTC) (Expand)
velvetwhipvelvetwhip on November 9th, 2008 01:57 am (UTC)
These are excellent!


Gabrielle
ClawofCat: angelus dru shhhclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:40 am (UTC)
Thanks! It was a lot of fun writing them. Haiku are kinda... neat. ;)
mere ubu: spike rock onmere_ubu on November 9th, 2008 02:03 am (UTC)
Woohoo! These kick ass, sweetie. And the first one gave me chills. I really like the way that your focus on what he takes from (or is given) in each battle ties the two groups together. Good on yer!

Edited at 2008-11-09 02:04 am (UTC)
ClawofCatclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:43 am (UTC)
Thanks. I had a lot of fun writing them. There was much syllable counting on my fingers as I was drafting these.

It's kind of weird how he carries his victories around with him constantly, between the scar in his eyebrow and Nikki's coat. It's like he swaths himself in the lore he created for himself. Hm, insecure much, Spike?
ares132006ares132006 on November 9th, 2008 04:20 am (UTC)
Blood of the Slayer
brings him Drusilla, at last
princess to his king


Oh yeah. He earned his place.

Great work.
ClawofCat: SpikeDruclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:46 am (UTC)
He's a man willing to work his way up the social ladder, that's for sure! Meritocracy for the win! Quality (of the kill) over quantity.

Thanks for reading.
Elenamoscow_watcher on November 9th, 2008 08:36 am (UTC)
Awesome. A permanent reminder that she could have won sends shivers down the spine. Blinded by darkness is incredibly poetic.
ClawofCat: nycspikeclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:11 pm (UTC)
When you think back to that moment with the Chinese Slayer, she would have had him if that explosion hadn't broken the window. One could speculate that his "spoils of war" keep him honest, but we know Spike's got a hugely overblown ego and is incredily impetuous.

Blinded by darkness is incredibly poetic.
Thanks! I actually meant that quite literally. In the ep, Nikki has the upper hand until the lights in the subway go dark. When they come back, Spike is "on top" choking her.
(no subject) - moscow_watcher on November 9th, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Cath: punk spikestars_of_tears on November 9th, 2008 10:13 am (UTC)
These were great! :)
ClawofCat: buffy smileclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:12 pm (UTC)
Thank you! It was a creative challenge, that wasn't time consuming. Which, you know, equals win.
Sotiassddgr on November 9th, 2008 11:32 am (UTC)
They're both extremely beautiful, and I'm once again amazed by how much feeling you can put in so few words (I'm still not over the last drabble you posted)

*hugs*
ClawofCat: buffy pensiveclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:17 pm (UTC)
Thanks. Using words economically is interesting because it really forces you to choose wisely and consider the meaning of each one. It's like trimming the fat off a piece of meat. There's less of the cut, but you get a leaner meal. Give it a try! Haiku's are sort of addictive.

I'm still not over the last drabble you posted
Which was that? The music metaphor one?
(no subject) - ssddgr on November 9th, 2008 05:34 pm (UTC) (Expand)
Maz: Dovethismaz on November 9th, 2008 12:01 pm (UTC)
Very nice! I particularly like the first two - a permanent reminder / that she could have won and Drusilla, at last / princess to his king
Lovely.
ClawofCat: stake spikeclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:20 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I also like the eyebrow referance because it's true. She could have won; she nearly did. Spike's impetuous, but seasoned. He doesn't underestimate his prey or his enemies. I do wish that he had lived up to his reputation and done more to best Buffy in the early seasons, though. The wheelchair kinda put him out of commission :(
louise39: spike  leather coatlouise39 on November 9th, 2008 02:41 pm (UTC)
Powerful.
a permanent reminder
that she could have won


Spike always wanted the fight, the battle. The possibility of defeat, I think, added piquancy to his victory. The victories brought rewards, too...trophies and Drusilla.

she falls, victim to his hands
released from her yolk

It's almost as if he is paying tribute to a warrior.
ClawofCat: spikesmilesclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:37 pm (UTC)
The possibility of defeat, I think, added piquancy to his victory.
Absolutely. Spike says as much in "Fool for Love." Where other vampires schirked from the Slayer, he sought her out. Had a bit of his own death wish, didn't he? It's also a matter of status. Bested by the best makes your death epic, and Spike has never been one to go out with a whimper.

It's almost as if he is paying tribute to a warrior.
Spike knows the life and burdens of Slayers. I don't think he was kidding when he told Buffy they really wanted it. He gave them a way out, however hard and violent it may have been. Spike respects death and respects the Slayer as an entity. That sense of "honor" infused much of his interactions with Slayers past and present.

All very good points, hun! Thanks for the thoughtful feedback.
brutti_ma_buonibrutti_ma_buoni on November 9th, 2008 04:38 pm (UTC)
I think all the lines have already been quoted back at you, so I'll just say that I really enjoyed these!
ClawofCat: Buffy stake raisedclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:38 pm (UTC)
Thanks. It was a great flash challenge. Different, but not time-consuming.
slaymesoftlyslaymesoftly on November 9th, 2008 04:38 pm (UTC)
Well-done, sweetie!
ClawofCat: good timesclawofcat on November 9th, 2008 05:39 pm (UTC)
Thanks! Haiku are kinda addictive. Did you try the challenge too and I missed it?
(no subject) - slaymesoftly on November 9th, 2008 10:14 pm (UTC) (Expand)
brunettepetbrunettepet on November 10th, 2008 11:03 pm (UTC)
I liked both of these but these were particularly powerful phrases:

Blade to brow cuts deep flows beautifully.

Gilded black leather
marks his deadly signature
Again, this flows beautifully and captures the strength Spike takes from that particular trophy.

One quibble, in the second Nikki is released from her yoke rather than yolk.
ClawofCat: buffy smileclawofcat on November 11th, 2008 01:27 am (UTC)
Thanks for pointing out the typo. All fixed. Nikki certainly isn't hatching from an egg!

Glad you liked my contribution. These were a lot of fun to write. Using words economically is the best exercise. It goes to show that power is in words themselves, not necessarily how many there are.