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24 September 2008 @ 01:12 pm
Drabble ~ Maestro  
I just wrote this off the cuff for my dear framedinlove , who is having a hard day. Music has been cheering her up, so music is what the drabble is about. Does this mean my writer's block has lifted?

Title: Maestro
Timing: Season 6
Rating: R for the sex
Pairing: Spike/Buffy

He is her cover of darkness, she thinks, as his chest lurches above her, holding a steady, swaying cadence. Back and forth, back and forth, he withdraws and returns, hypnotically consistent like a ticking metronome. Her shoulders brush the carpets, each rough push and rocking thrust a timed beat.

 

One leg thrown across his back, she is bowed double so that he can play her, striking the keys that will release her high notes. Together they pant a stuttering duet of sighs. Death is her gift, but music is his, she realizes, when he conducts them to a halting crescendo.


 
 
 
hello_spikeyhello_spikey on September 24th, 2008 05:59 pm (UTC)
brava! *clap clap*

(He can, uh, perform for me anytime...)
ClawofCat: spikesmilesclawofcat on September 24th, 2008 07:16 pm (UTC)
LOL. Yes, I could see the cast and crew strewning the set with rose petals and popping champagne bottles after that performance.

ellan_vannin on September 24th, 2008 06:36 pm (UTC)
That was too cool. Very visual for such aural reference.

Now if you'll excuse me, my iPod and I need a private moment.
ClawofCat: spike pleasureclawofcat on September 24th, 2008 07:21 pm (UTC)
The idea that something I wrote is "cool" is so... cool! It's amazing how much descriptive mileage you can wring out of a couple of metaphors. Check out my Spuffy ficlet "Unquenched." That's a doozy of clever metaphors about life cycles.

Now if you'll excuse me, my iPod and I need a private moment.
*coughs* I'll, uh, avert my eyes.
mere ubu: s/b love kissmere_ubu on September 24th, 2008 06:42 pm (UTC)
Mmm. String geek me is loving the all the musical imagery. This is just beautiful.

Encore? ;)
ClawofCat: glancesclawofcat on September 24th, 2008 07:25 pm (UTC)
'Tis a pretty little piece. I'm glad you liked it. The drabble itself has a nice cadence to it. There's actually a meter in Latin lyric poetry that's meant to sound like the galloping of horses. It doesn't work in English, of course, because our grammar and conjugations are totally different, but it's lovely when you can cram and adapt a foreign literary concept into your own work. Or, at least try to ;)

Did you ever play an instrument? I had a go at guitar at age 11, but it never stuck.
mere ubu: s/b rug smilemere_ubu on September 24th, 2008 07:55 pm (UTC)
Oh, that's cool about the meter. And the drabble does indeed have its own unique rhythm.

*nods* I started playing violin when I was four and was forced into orchestral servitude until college when I finally dropped it all and ran screaming. (I somehow ended up with ten hours of music a week and I wasn't even a major. The hell?!) I still play sometimes for fun, but that's about it.
petzipellepingo: donne dead things by buffyxpetzipellepingo on September 24th, 2008 07:08 pm (UTC)
Death is her gift, but music is his, she realizes, when he conducts them to a halting crescendo.


Very nice.
ClawofCat: orgasmclawofcat on September 24th, 2008 07:26 pm (UTC)
*bows* Thanks. You never know what random things will give you fresh inspiration.
dragonflylady77dragonflylady77 on September 24th, 2008 07:52 pm (UTC)
Smuttingly lovely or is it lovely smutty? Anyways, me likes lots.

The last line is definitely quote material!
ClawofCat: coc spuffy embraceclawofcat on September 24th, 2008 08:32 pm (UTC)
Perhaps, lovingly smutty? Or, because adverbs are evil, the simplified 'lovely smut?' ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed it. It was painless to write, so I'm a fan!

The last line is definitely quote material!
Now I'd love a manip of a conductor, except no pants and Spike's head. Hubba!
dragonflylady77dragonflylady77 on September 24th, 2008 08:36 pm (UTC)
Oh yeah!!

Adverbs *are* evil!
louise39: Spuffy  reaching hands    shadowlouise39 on September 24th, 2008 11:10 pm (UTC)
Elegant music metaphor...

They create a harmony somehow.

one of the reasons I love this pair

ClawofCat: coc spuffy kissclawofcat on September 25th, 2008 02:34 am (UTC)
Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it. I don't know a lot about music, but if you give me a theme I can, without fail, work it into a sex scene, lol.
framedinlove: banner iconframedinlove on September 25th, 2008 05:56 pm (UTC)
I know I already gushed over this at my journal yesterday, but I felt like gushing some more and so here I am. *g*

I've always thought that music makes a beautiful metaphor for sex. There's the rhythm, the bass and the drums, pulsating throughout the song, making your whole body vibrate to the beat. There's the singing, the words, screamed whispered beautiful harsh, perfectly bare and honest, coming from somewhere deep within, urging you to lose yourself in the music. There's the structure, the dramatic arc of the song, the beginning that lures you in and the waves of the verses and the choruses and then there's the climax crashing against the shores of an after-glowing ending. This is the listener's point of view, I reckon. This is what the first paragraph of the drabble brings to my mind.

Then comes the second paragraph, and the view angle changes a bit. Now there's an utterly talented artist playing an instrument. Violent grip, hitting the notes with feverish strokes. Gentle touch, whisper of a sound, just as effective. He's creating something powerful and beautiful and unique, conjuring up sounds that'll set even the most scarred hearts on fire, leaving you no chance but to join in for the chorus.

I don't think I've ever seen anyone use musical metaphors as beautifully as you do in this drabble. They feel so natural, so right. I'm still sort of flabbergasted that it's only two paragraphs long of a piece. It truly takes skills way beyond me to create such an emotionally charged, powerful and vivid scene within the medium of a drabble. *is in awe*

I'm feeling almost illegally elated that you wrote this for me. For me of all the people! Wow! How lucky am I?! :D
Thank you ever so much and then some! I love love love it, and it's doing a bang up job making me smile time after time! :) *hugs you tight*
ClawofCat: giddyclawofcat on September 26th, 2008 06:15 am (UTC)
Christ, Anni. Using description language like that (pulsating, vibrate, climax, deep inside, feverish strokes) in your second and third paragraphs is liable to cause some spontaneus orgasms around here. Woo! *fans self* You just wrote your own smutty drabble, honey.

This is the listener's point of view, I reckon. Then comes the second paragraph, and the view angle changes a bit.
Those are really good observations. I hadn't noticed it until you pointed it out, but the first paragraph is from Buffy's POV and then the narrative lens pulls back a little so that we see the scene of both of them together rather than from Buffy's limited filter. I didn't do that consciously.

I don't think I've ever seen anyone use musical metaphors as beautifully as you do in this drabble. They feel so natural
Thank you, darling. If nothing else, I always aim for beauty in my work. There can be an angst storm blowing through, pain and suffering, joy and hope, but I always work to make it sound beautiful. Since I write short pieces, I can really take the time to focus on my style and how the words fit together. That nuance and artistry sometimes gets lost in longer, plotty stories.

It truly takes skills way beyond me to create such an emotionally charged, powerful and vivid scene within the medium of a drabble.
Man, you should see some of the work by people that regularly drabble. Pretty amazing stuff. Hell, mere_ubu's Spaiku's sometimes choke me up and those are only 36 words! It just goes to show that length has nothing to do with how skilled someone is as a writer. Epic stories and their writer's are the ones that get remembered in fandom as "the greats." But I have so much respect for other fandom writers like myself that write in shorter formats. Cause you know what? It's hard! Writing in general is hard, period.

I'm feeling almost illegally elated that you wrote this for me. For me of all the people!
I wanted to make you happy. And one day I'll write you something that has length to it. This was just a teeny thing. I want you to have that full length shot. *hugs*
framedinlove: banner iconframedinlove on September 26th, 2008 09:29 pm (UTC)
You just wrote your own smutty drabble, honey.
I did? *is utterly dumbfounded* Well, how about that? Lol. I had no idea I was even capable of writing a drabble let alone smut. Hee, what a fun thought, though! If I was to write a drabble what else could it possibly be but music porn! *giggles* Yayness, I'm feeling soooo cheerful right now! ;D

mere_ubu writes Spaikus? As in Spike + haiku = Spaiku? Wow, that sounds really fascinating! I'll most definitely check her journal out as soon as I can.

Thank you so much once again! You've made me smile like a million times during the last couple days alone, and it has made a world of difference! I don't even have the words to express how grateful I am. *hugs you tight*
ClawofCat: omfgclawofcat on September 26th, 2008 10:01 pm (UTC)
She does, indeed, write Spike and Spuffy-centric haikus. They're really brilliant. She's got a beautiful, lyrical style mixed in with a biting sense of humor. Nobody snarks as well as mere_ubu. She's one of my favorite fandom people. Definately friend her. You won't regret it. All her Spaiku can be read HERE.

She also does a little something she calls doll!fic in which she poses her Spike, Buffy and Angel action fingers in obscene tableus and writes little dialogue balloons. They are piss-your-pants funny. Seriously. She often does them for people's birthdays -- Doll!fic.

Hee! Enjoy! Let the giggeling begin.
Cath: spuffy purplestars_of_tears on September 28th, 2008 09:12 pm (UTC)
Wonderful metaphor :)
ClawofCat: feel aliveclawofcat on September 28th, 2008 09:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you! I really enjoyed writing this tiny piece.